Peer review

James Froelich

All About The Meatloaf

4-5-2011

James Froelich

Peer Review Worksheet

1. Introduction: How does the first paragraph introduce both the paper’s topic and the writer’s approach or general conclusion? Is the first sentence attention-getting and relevant to the topic?

2. What can you identify as a thesis statement? (Re-write it below) Suggest, if possible, a way to improve the introduction or thesis statement.

                            "All throughout this paper I will be finding out which typpe of meatloaf is healthier the current recipe for meatloaf that my mom makes, or the old classic recipe from 1911."  They could improve this thesis statement by making it shorter and make it go straight to the point.

3. Structure: Can you identify the organization of the paper from the main idea of each paragraph? What are the main concepts explored in the paper? Does each paragraph make a relevant point that is distinct from what has already been covered? What are the main conclusions?

                             I could identify the organization of the paper and identify the main idea of each paragraph.  The first paragraph is about both recipes and the relevant ingredients that will be used in the essay to prove his point.  Then he goes into the reason why he believes its healthier by talking about the beef that's used in the recipe.  Then talks about the book "Fast Food Nation" and how its relevant to his argument about his thesis.

4. Clarity/Style: Did you find distracting grammar, punctuation, spelling, or word usage problems? Identify any patterns or themes you detect. Is the tone of the essay formal? If you find awkward sentences, try to explain why they don’t make sense to you.

                            I did not see any obvious grammar, punctuation, spelling, or even word usage problems.  The tone of the essay is formal and i did not find any awkward sentances.

5. Resources: Does the author clearly identify his/her sources? Is proper in-text and reference format used?

6. What is/are the paper’s greatest strength(s)? Explain.

                                      I do believe the first sentence is attention rabbing and is relevant to the topic.  The first paragraph goes straight into the point of the essay, giving a few key information that does summarize what the essay is mainly all about.